Screenplay Analysis and Consultation

Detailed Script Breakdown

I provide a written 8-12 page analysis (not coverage) focused primarily on Character, Relationships, and Story Structure/Execution. There's a lot more in there including feedback on Dialogue, Tone, Visuals, and Marketability.

A Better Analysis

The hardest part for writers is not knowing how to incorporate script notes to make their story work better. As part of my analysis, you'll find useful suggestions and options that can help you fix the issues.

Phone Convo & Follow-Up

You'll receive an hour+ phone call to answer any questions as a result of my analysis. Any follow-up questions and ideas will be answered by email.

My Story

My name is Dave Hirschmann and beginning in Chicago over 20 years ago I started writing screenplays. I read most of the prominent screenwriting books, studied films, plugged away on a laptop, and a few years later moved to Los Angeles to pursue a career in screenwriting and cinematography. I co-wrote five feature-length scripts ...

Blog Posts

Things kicking around my head these days...

Talkin’ flashbacks

Screenwriters are always looking for clever ways to tell a story.  And none more clever than the tried, true and often employed flashback.  Many of our favorite films put flashbacks to great use weaving well-told tales through different times and places.  So if those scripts can do it, why shouldn’t yours?  By all means!  But before you begin, let’s have a little chat about story structure.

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Visual storytelling, the sometimes forgotten tool

As someone who has spent most of his adult life looking through a camera viewfinder, it’s hard to imagine that everyone (including some screenwriters) don’t see the world as mental photographs like I do.  When I get to set each day, my job starts with the script pages (known as ‘sides’) of a scene we’ll be shooting. As I read the scene, I try and walk the set to see what angle and details speak to the visual representation of the characters and story in this scene.  Also, what would look cool. 

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Writing lessons learned from working on set

I first started working on professional TV and film sets in 2001. While I had been writing screenplays for a few years, my interest in filmmaking (specifically the camera department) seemed completely separate from the stories I was trying to tell through my laptop. But the more time I spent on set reading these professional screenplays (professional to the tune of a few million dollars per episode) and watching the actors perform, the more I realized this would be as good a screenwriting teacher as all the books and seminars on the subject.

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